My poem. um yeah. hard time at the moment.. 4th poem EVER by me?
12 way streets
i cant get out
stuck inside
i need to escape.
escape to clear my mind
is it him
does he love me
does he not
a maze
a race just to prove myself
his face
his smile
his lips
so close
yet is this land i dare to tread
choices
desicions
consuming me
i just need time
time to set me free
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Give me your thoughts?
critique 
xxx
Bless
Thankyou!:)
&& yes 12 way street had a meaning.
irl thats sorta hard to come byxD
but basically i have 12 choices about something.. i need to choose the right one
"a maze a race just to prove myself" is fantastic. . the word "tread" which comes back to the maze; "choices decisions" in the third stanza. The maze as a metapor for relationships. A very literate work..Send it out somewhere and get it published..
2009 Toys for Tots 1/8e Buggy Main Event (12/20/09)
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